[Application] Raven Westward <6th Division>

[Gods_Might10]

Name: Raven Westward

Age: At death 28 Became a soul reaper 102

Appearance: An American, 6 feet tall weight 255 pounds, Jet black hair with a single streek of white on the left side. there is a large scar on his right cheek. there was always a pensive look on his face. a avrage looking body no exceptional muscle mass

Personality: The wise type on the exterior soft spoken in the walls of the seireitei, but when in the heat of battle his will to protect his comrades is the most evident thing about him. his presence was always felt no matter what company he kept captains or commoners.

Biography: He lived in one of the less violent areas of the Rukongai but his sprit was one of a wonderer so he spent 50 years wondering thought all of the districts and found himself fighting to protect others where ever he went his time in zaraki is what made him decide to become a soul reaper

Division Being applied to:6th Division

Zanpakuto Appearance:

Sealed: A Shirasaya ( same dimensions as a normal katana but with no guard or fittings sheath and hilt are pure wood) Black Lacquered


Shikai: Name rokotsu setsudanki (blunt cutter) appearance a black metal shaft with decoration used as a handle approximately 5 foot 8 inches and weighs 80 pounds. there is no edge on the weapon at all but rokotsu setsudanki's power compensates for that flaw

sample Mission:
Raven was on assignment in the world of the living. he had been there for almost a year and had killed a hollow here and there but he felt unsatisfied by this, the hollows hadn't proved a worthy challenge for him he felt as if if he didn't find a worthy opponent soon he felt he might forget how to call on his rokotsu setsudanki. just as he thought this to himself he was sent a message on his soul pager telling him of a large hollow not far from him he thought that this hollow would also leave him with no feeling of satisfaction. but as he approached the hollow he felt a spirit pressure that was almost crushing. when he found the hollow it was massive in both body and power. he looked the hollow over and felt a wave of excitement come over him. this is what he had wanted this whole time. he jumped up unsheathed his zanpaktou and sliced a deep gash in one of the hollows four arms this got the beasts attention and it slammed Raven with tremendous force into the side of a small building. the blow had little effect on Raven and he pressed back twoards the mighty hollow. their battle went on for a short while after another crushing blow from the giant hollow Raven smiled and stood up and called "Cut through the sky rokotsu setsudanki!" his sword twisted and took the shape of his massive edgeless shikai he lunged at the beast and in two long swipes of his weapon the hollow had lost all four of its arms. Raven smiled once again and looked at the beast of a hollow and said "This is just what I needed, I thank you hollow, But now I must end this." he walked over to the hollow and he lifted his weapon up and sent it sailing though the hollows head. Raven finally felt satisfied with his time in the world of the living

[alannacho]

Thank you for applying to BARPG, Raven Westward.

First off, you need to use complete sentences within the followings areas of the application: appearance, personality, biography, zanpakuto appearance, and sample mission. There are numerous run-on sentences throughout your application as well.

Appearance, personality, biography, and zanpakuto appearance appear lacking in descriptions. Adding more detail to all areas will paint us a better picture of who you are, what makes 'you' you, and more. Also, starting out, you do not have access to shikai. Please remove that from your application as well as mission. You have to earn your shikai.

Your sample mission in general is too short. You need 1000 words minimum. Also, start a new paragraph every 4 to 6 sentences when focus of the paragraph has changed. Also, new paragraphs should be started when conversation moves from one person to another. This helps with the flow of the mission and keeps those who read it from becoming confused.

I suggest that you use a word processing program to type up you application. The tools in word processing programs can check for spelling and grammar. Also I suggest having a 3rd party not associated with BARPG to read your application. They may catch something that you may have missed.

[Gods_Might10]

Name: Raven Westward

Age: At death 28 Became a soul reaper 102

Appearance: An American, 6 feet tall weight 255 pounds, Jet black hair with a single streak of white on the left side. there is a large scar on his right cheek. there was always a pensive look on his face, as if always lost in thought. an average looking body with no exceptional muscle mass.On his shihakusho he has removed all white from it and replaced it with his favorite color crimson

Personality: The wise type on the exterior . He maintains a level of approachability and is always willing to give his take on a problem. No matter who‘s problem it was. He tended to be soft spoken within the walls of the seireitei, but when in the heat of battle his will to protect his comrades, the innocent, the week and to judge the guilty is the most evident thing about him. his presence was always felt no matter what company he kept captains or commoners.

Biography: In his life he could remember a devotion to protect the week and the downtrodden. He could remember a wife and a child whom he longed to see again. But most of all he remembered his death, not in great detail but he knew one thing it was a betrayal of his trust, but that was all he could remember of his life. In death he found a life in one of the less violent areas of the Rukongai. But his sprit was one of a wonderer and a protector, so he spent over 50 years wondering thought all of the districts and found himself fighting to protect others where ever he went. his time in zaraki and the sorrow and bloodshed he saw there is what made him decide to become a soul reaper

Division Being applied to:6th Division

Zanpakuto Appearance:

Sealed: A Shirasaya ( same dimensions as a normal katana but with no guard or fittings sheath and hilt are pure wood) Black Lacquered with a crimson habaki (blade collar) and hi (blood channel)

Sample Mission:
Raven was on assignment in the world of the living. He had only graduated from the academy a year prevous and had yet to be assigned to a squad and this assignment was just the thing to get him noticed. He had asked to be assigned to a large city where strong hollows appered more often. In the hopes that he could get a greater chance at being noticed. But instead was sent to large farming community.

He had been there for almost a year and had only killed a few hollows and had grown to enjoy a good fight he would more often than not toy with the hollow to prolong the fight. but he felt unsatisfied by this. None of the hollows hadn't proved a worthy challenge for him and he felt as if he didn't find a worthy opponent soon his zanpaktou might rust over. just as he thought this to himself he was sent a message on his soul pager telling him of a large hollow not far from him.

He thought that this hollow would also leave him with no feeling of satisfaction. but as he approached the hollow he felt a spirit pressure that was almost crushing. When he found the hollow it was massive in both body and it’s power was incalculable.

He looked the hollow over and felt a wave of excitement come over him. this is what he had wanted this for what felt like a long time. To him the battles between him and a hollow had become nothing more than a game. He smiled and he jumped up and unsheathed his zanpaktou and in a flash of motion carved a deep gash in one of the hollows four tremendous arms. This got the beasts attention and it slammed Raven with tremendous force into the side of a small building.

The blow had little effect on Raven and he pressed back towards the mighty hollow. The hollow was able to deflect his zanpaktou. Raven’s adrenalin rushed and it felt good he and the hollow were evenly matched and their battle went on for a short while longer. After another crushing blow from the giant hollow Raven noticed inside of the small building a little girl who was crushed by the debris. The smile disappeared from his face as he looked at the child who had died because he was having fun in the battle.

He screamed in rage and lunged at the beast and in a furry of slashes and long swipes of his sword the hollow had lost all four of its arms and had received severe wounds. Raven looked at the creature and felt mixed feelings part of him relished the intense battle, but the other felt guilt for cutting the life of a young girl short he walked away from the crippled hollow and walked over to the body of the young girl and saw that the soul chain had been severed he looked around and spotted the soul of the little girl he walked over.

“Are you alright little girl?” he said. She looked up at him and asked
“What happened to me? Did I… did I die?” Raven stared to respond but before he could she said
“If I did that’s ok I wanted to see my mommy and daddy again.” he smiled and said
“Then I will send you to them.” he preformed the konso but felt no alleviation of guilt He who wanted to protect so much had allowed a young girls life to be cut short and at that moment he walked over to the hollows broken body and quickly dispatched it. Since then he vowed to think before acting and to never again allow such a needless death.

[Cyclonus_Zaero]

Appearance: Just another paragraph here.

Personality: Yet again another paragraph (3 sentances or more)

Bio: You got a 102 years in the Soul Society to play with. Just pick a small event and outline it and you should be good here.

Zanpakuto:
I like the Shirasaya idea. Does you weapon have hilt markings or scabbard markings?

Just do those and try reapplying

[Gods_Might10]

Name: Raven Westward

Age: At death 28 Became a soul reaper 102

Appearance: An American, 6 feet tall weight 255 pounds, Jet black hair with a single streak of white on the left side. there is a large scar on his right cheek. there was always a pensive look on his face, as if always lost in thought.His face is a a solid look not handsome nor ugly but not plain. His eyes are a deep brown almost black. an average looking body with no exceptional muscle mass. On his shihakusho he has removed all white from it and replaced it with his favorite color crimson. He usually carries his zanpaktou in his left hand held to his arm by a chain so he doesn't have to hold it all the time.

Personality: The wise type on the exterior . He maintains a level of approachability and is always willing to give his take on a problem. No matter who‘s problem it was. He tended to be soft spoken within the walls of the seireitei, but when in the heat of battle his will to protect his comrades, the innocent, the week and to judge the guilty is the most evident thing about him. his presence was always felt no matter what company he kept captains or commoners. But he never thought himself better than anyone. while respectful to his superiors he considers everyone equal. He presents himself as a father to everyone he meets.

Biography: In his life he could remember a devotion to protect the week and the downtrodden. He could remember a wife and a child whom he longed to see again. But most of all he remembered his death, not in great detail but he knew one thing it was a betrayal of his trust, but that was all he could remember of his life. In death he found a life in one of the less violent areas of the Rukongai. But his sprit was one of a wanderer and a protector, so he spent over 50 years wondering thought all of the districts and found himself fighting to protect others where ever he went. his time in zaraki and the sorrow and bloodshed he saw there is what made him decide to become a soul reaper. As he went through the academy he found himself as the "go to guy" always helping others to get ahead rather than help himself witch cost him another 40 years training at the academy. his skills were top notch but his grades were never good enough to graduate. finally after another 10 years he graduated from the academy 3rd in his class. and was assigned to an outside force instead of one of the 13 court guard squads,witch disappointed him greatly. he felt as if he were being overlooked because of his lengthy tenure at the the academy and felt like he had to prove himself somehow.

Division Being applied to:6th Division

Zanpakuto Appearance:

Sealed: A Shirasaya ( same dimensions as a normal katana but with no guard or fittings sheath and hilt are pure wood) Black Lacquered with a crimson habaki (blade collar) and hi (blood channel) The sheath has a crimson spiral going up from the bottom to the mid section and a white spiral going from the top to the midsection. the hilt has a deep groove on each side.

Sample Mission:
Raven was on assignment in the world of the living. He had only graduated from the academy a year previous and had yet to be assigned to a squad and this assignment was just the thing to get him noticed. He had asked to be assigned to a large city where strong hollows appeared more often. In the hopes that he could get a greater chance at being noticed. But instead was sent to large farming community.

He had been there for almost a year and had only killed a few hollows and had grown to enjoy a good fight he would more often than not toy with the hollow to prolong the fight. but he felt unsatisfied by this. None of the hollows hadn't proved a worthy challenge for him and he felt as if he didn't find a worthy opponent soon his zanpaktou might rust over. just as he thought this to himself he was sent a message on his soul pager telling him of a large hollow not far from him.

He thought that this hollow would also leave him with no feeling of satisfaction. but as he approached the hollow he felt a spirit pressure that was almost crushing. When he found the hollow it was massive in both body and it’s power was incalculable.

He looked the hollow over and felt a wave of excitement come over him. this is what he had wanted this for what felt like a long time. To him the battles between him and a hollow had become nothing more than a game. He smiled and he jumped up and unsheathed his zanpaktou and in a flash of motion carved a deep gash in one of the hollows four tremendous arms. This got the beasts attention and it slammed Raven with tremendous force into the side of a small building.

The blow had little effect on Raven and he pressed back towards the mighty hollow. The hollow was able to deflect his zanpaktou. Raven’s adrenalin rushed and it felt good he and the hollow were evenly matched and their battle went on for a short while longer. After another crushing blow from the giant hollow Raven noticed inside of the small building a little girl who was crushed by the debris. The smile disappeared from his face as he looked at the child who had died because he was having fun in the battle.

He screamed in rage and lunged at the beast and in a furry of slashes and long swipes of his sword the hollow had lost all four of its arms and had received severe wounds. Raven looked at the creature and felt mixed feelings part of him relished the intense battle, but the other felt guilt for cutting the life of a young girl short he walked away from the crippled hollow and walked over to the body of the young girl and saw that the soul chain had been severed he looked around and spotted the soul of the little girl he walked over.

“Are you alright little girl?” he said. She looked up at him and asked
“What happened to me? Did I… did I die?” Raven stared to respond but before he could she said
“If I did that’s ok I wanted to see my mommy and daddy again.” he smiled and said
“Then I will send you to them.” he preformed the konso but felt no alleviation of guilt He who wanted to protect so much had allowed a young girls life to be cut short and at that moment he walked over to the hollows broken body and quickly dispatched it. Since then he vowed to think before acting and to never again allow such a needless death.