Application>Amico Migliorre>11th division

[Grimmjow13]

Name:Amico Migliorre (italian
for best friend)

Gender: male

Age: At death, 16, and in soul society 27.

Apperance: Amico is a very handsome man. He is 6'3" and has a good muscle build with well toned arms. He weighs 143 pounds. He has a long, slender face, and is a light brown skintone. His eyes appear to be brown in the right eye and a green one in the left, but his eyes are both green.He has a small, gentle nose. He has spiky, burgundy hair and black facial hair. He has a thin mustache and a small soulpatch. He also has a kanji on his neck, which stands for love, and kanji on his upper left arm and lower right arm meaning respect and power.He wears the usual shinigami uniform when in soul society, but in anywhere else, he wears a short sleeve burgundy shirt with black sleeves and black pants.

Personality:
Amico is a kind man. He cares about everyone he meets. However, he is protective- willing to kill almost anyone for hurting a close friend. He doesn't like to have his hair touched, and punches people who do as instint. he is a funny man,but can get serious. He tends to mock his enimies.But, after mocking them repeatedly, he begins to get bored-and very serious. Amico also has a low level of eyesight because of the 2 times in his life where he was hit in the eye- the 1st by a kidou and the 2nd by a cero that killed him.

Amico has a strong hatred for hollows- because of his untimely death by one, and his best friend being killed by one. However, even though he doesn't show it, has a fear of vasto lordes. He feels he is not strong enough to defeat them. Amico also seems to really love to drink. Akwardly, he hates the name Kenpachi. He suffers from thanatophobia-a fear of dying- but only shows in very near-death situations. He also for some reason dislikes transportation other than walking.

[Grimmjow13]

Zanpakuto:
Amico was the only person in the academy to have an actual zanpakuto- since he had died in possesion of one. The zanpakuto is completly burgundy colored exept for its unique tsuba. The tsuba is black and is the shape of a rectangular pyramid with the tip pointing at his grip. The blade itself is 118cm, the handle is 18cm, and the tsuba goes up covering the bottom 15cm of the blade. The sheath is decorated with white diamonds going across the sides, and he wears it on his left hip. A shard of the zanpakuto is in his left eye so when he gets shikai he can use attacks without the rest of the zanpakuto. He usually does not use a stance, but when he does, he holds the sword backwards or grips it with both hands and places it to his right side. It tends to drag on the ground while sheathed because of its long length.

Biography:
Amico is 33% portugese (father),and 33 italian and asian(mother and grandfather). Even after going back to Karakura town(where he died. Its all in the sample mission) he cannot remember the names of them. Amico had to move from place to place because his mother served in the military and throught his life there was a massive war. After turning 14, a shinigami that he met trained him to fight adjuchas and later that year gave him a zanpakuto(it actually wasnt his) because he saw the boy was stronger than him. At age 16 he was killed by a cero blast to the left eye- accidentaly. He wants to be 11th squad cpt. because he was taken to SS by the previous cpt. However, he hates the name Kenpachi(once again, read the sample mission, its all in there) Also, his father was a vice-captain level vizard that couldnt beat his inner hollow.He died about 5 months after giving him his 15th birthday present. At age 15, Amico began to battle hollows as part of his training. He could easily defeat hollows, but could only manage to get a draw against low-class menos. He woulr repeatedly ask to go to hueco mundo for harder training, but was denied every time until his untimely death.

He also picked up drinking-a lot. He began to at about age 13, and to this day has memories of his mother calling him her "little alchoholic" after any social gathering that they would go to. He discovered at age 15 while training with his mentor that while drinking he'd go into a super-focused state-doing fewer attacks but each being much more powerful. He related this to a man that is driving while drunk, because there are guys that get drunk and lose the driving ability all together, and guys that gut drunk and become super-focused because they know its a bad idea. This metaphor is also not fitting his character because he likes to walk more than anything.

[MagicalBells]

Hey there, welcome to the BARPG Amico.

First, I would like to advise that you keep everything about your application within one thread. So please move your sample mission into this thread as well.

Secondly, please try to space out your application's paragraphs so that it is easier to read and neater.

Once you have fixed these two things up, I'll be happy to help you with the application as a whole.

[Grimmjow13]

Those problems will be fixed by friday night. You see, I am posting via cell phone, so there is a limit to how much I can type. I did the mission at library.

:(Sample mission: Return to Karakura town.
After Amico graduated, he began to have both memories of the academy and nightmares of his death. He was only 16 when 3 shinigami came to Karakura town to kill 4 adjuchas. Amico was watching the battle when he was shot in the left eye by a stray cero. After hitting the ground, he looked up to find one of the shinigami picking him up. The man had an 11 on his back. The next thing he knew, he was in the 10th district of SS.

The next night, he recalled his first day of academy life.He had the worst day of his life here. It wasnt until age 20 when he signed up. He had many friends in his district, and they were all signing up.But only him and his girlfriend were accepted.He had a large class, and a teacher that apperantly hated teaching. The teacher stated that his name was not important, and if you guessed it, you would be killed by him.(Um, excuse me Kenpach..). His girlfriend guesed it right, and was killed in front of everyone.(I told ya what would happen.) Everybody in class knew that it was not exactly a good idea to mess with Amico's friends, but he still did. In a rage Amico threw the man out of the window, unleashed his crimson-colored reatsu, and unsheathed his zanpakuto(he is the only person in the academy to have an actual zanpakuto).




"You...Killed...Her" Amico angrily said. "hmp. Do you know how you get the name Kenpachi? You get it b.." Amico, having heard enough charged at his vice captian ranked sensei, and hacked at an arm."Im going to beat the h^*l out of you!!" In anger, Kenpachi cut Amico's left arm deeply and cut his chest to the point where he could barely take the pain."You cant beat me. You cant beat anyone! I AM Kenpachi!!!" "I don't need the name.. I dont need the name Kenpachi to KILL YOU" Amico charged, and tried to stab him. Kenpachi easily blocked, and followed up the block with a cut diagonnaly across the chest."He he. Your pretty good sensei. I have... I have to stop HOLDING BACK NOW!!! Amico charged again and this time weilding the sword backwards. Kenpachi, in shock, did not know how to block that akward of an attack style. Amico was able to get in a fatal cut across the heart and chest before he ran out of reitsu."Looks.. l..Looks like i win. Sensei." He walked-more like stumbled-back into the classroom-bloody and the victor of the match.The class was so shocked, the respected him as their new sensei and bowed to him. It took 3 months for his arm and chest to heal.

The day after these memories, he finally decided to go to the place where he died. But going there only made things feel worse, as he met a familiar face. It was the elderly shinigami that gave Amico his zanpakuto. The man told him things that Amico coudn't recall-like how his brown eye looks brown because of a darkly colored contact he wears in that eye that seals off half of his riatsu-and things that he didnt know in the first place-like how Amico's father served under the man as his vice captian.His father had a very powerful fire zanpakuto- like Amico wants, and won many battles.However, his father lost his life in visard training-he couldn't defeat his inner hollow. But then, the elderly man was killed. By a vasto lorde. In a rage Amico faught the menos, but was also protecting the kids it was after. He went for a slash, but was easily blocked and knocked away."Im stronger than vice captains"he said. But even his vice captain-level strength wasnt enough to win. "You are strong to your race" the menos said. " but are nothing to mine. Amico went after him with on last attempt at a slash, but was hit at point-blank range with a cero- just below the heart. "You are not worth killing.. Shinigami fool. My name is Zenzeku, remember that. Because next time, I will kill you."

Amico, left for dead and depressed, went back to soul society where he met his fathers best friend from back in SS."Oh my god! These injuries are so severe. What happened to you boy." "I.. I couldn't stop."After these words, Amico passed into a koma."Come with me boy. Ive got alot of work to do. the man spent over 40 days healing Amico, and told him about how his father hoped he would be a great shinigami. He also told him to take special care of that zanpakuto of his, and to place a small peice in his left eye so that he could still use it's attacks without his arms, and a small peice inhis chest below his heart. That peice would hold in even more reitsu.

After a compelete year of healing, Amico decided to get into a fight. After all, he does want to be a member of squad 11. And the only thing he likes more than being a hero is fighting to save someone. So, he went to the 80th and worst district of rukongai-as he knew that people were killed there almost every day. And, after walking in, he quickly found a fight. seven men were attacking a woman for a gold sword she carried.In a mocking voice Amico said "You might wanna leave 'er alone. It'd be a shame if I had to kill ya'." "What!? You think you can take all of us!!" One of the weaker men said. He charged to the left of Amico. Amico easily dodged, and continued to mortaly wounding him."Wow. You guys suck." Amico thought."Well, who's next." All the men charged at Amico. Amico was able to kill all but 2 of the men, who reopened his wounds suffered preveously. "Sh*t. This D@mn wound." Amico said in pain. "I guess I gotta take it out." "Take out what" The 2 men said. Amico then took out the eyepatch. He was easily able to kill both the men, but suffered another wound. Also, 2 zanpakuto shards broke off the sword.


Amico, walking back to the man that had healed him before, did the things he recomended. He took one of the shards and placed it into his right eye in order to use the swords attack without the majority of the sword. Then he put one shard under his heart, to hold some of his zanpakutos energy inside of him until removed. But it would only work in an unsealed zanpakuto state. "Old man's gonna be pretty pissed off that I'm coming to him like this." He stated. He had just enough energy to walk-well, more like stumble- back to the mans hut. It took very long to heal him again.


After a full 2 years, Amico is finally healed and has a newfound respect for shinigami and his zanpakuto-he also has a hatred for all hollows. The gleam in his left eye is a shard of his zanpakuto, and he now has a motto. "Protect the ones you love. Don't let them get hurt. Don't let yourself be weaker than anyone else." He also says "I hate what hollows are. I hate what shinigamis have become Also, because of that 11th squad captain taking him to SS, Amico drems of becoming 11th squad cpt. as well

[Grimmjow13]

Problems fixed. So what do you think I need to correct next?

[MagicalBells]

It's definitely much neater at least. I'd like to see it in a clean form before we look for any errors in spelling or grammar that need fixing, so this time try to work for a few things:

1. Personality section is much too short. Some suggestions, but things you do not need to include: fears, alcoholic preferences, (does he like Sake or not) intelligence, whether he likes to read books or not. Things like that could beef it up quite a bit.

2. Please space out your individual sections into multiple paragraphs where applicable. This includes the Sample Mission. It's much easier to read and understand when the sections are neatly spaced. If gaps are not needed then don't place them, but otherwise put in paragraph separations.

3. Your sample mission is only 661 words. 1000 is the requirement, so beef that up a bit too.

Otherwise, you're doing well. Keep at it and soon you'll be on your way to where you want to be.

[Grimmjow13]

How many more words now

[Grimmjow13]

Finished now.

[Cyclonus_Zaero]

Your app looks pretty solid overall with just one or two things that need tweaking and you'll be golden for a Final.

Zanpakuto:
Biography:
Amico is 33% portugese (father),and 33 italian and asian(mother and grandfather). Even after going back to Karakura town(where he died. Its all in the sample mission on a separate thread) he cannot remember the names of them. Amico had to move from place to place because his mother served in the military and throught his life there was a massive war. After turning 14, a shinigami that he met trained him to fight adjuchas and later that year gave him a zanpakuto(it actually wasnt his) because he saw the boy was stronger than him. At age 16 he was killed by a cero blast to the left eye- accidentaly. He wants to be 11th squad cpt. because he was taken to SS by the previous cpt. However, he hates the name Kenpachi(once again, read the sample mission, its all in there. On a different thread.) Also, his father was a vice-captain level vizard that couldnt beat his inner hollow. Thats why he could hold his own against adjuchas.

1. Make the above a little longer, you can have multiple paragraphs if you want.

2.You chara was born before his father's loss to his Inner Hollow correct?

3. You do know now that you won't be able to fight on the level your chara did when he was alive? FYI: I had my chara be uber powerful when he was alive to, so you can go that route if you wish :).

[Grimmjow13]

I think i fixed the.. Well edited the sections you reccomended. Oh, by the way, am I supposed to post another final application or do the mods just change the denial post to an acceptance one?

[Cyclonus_Zaero]

Well since it's me I'll just appove it here and move it myself.


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