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GinMaru Yuuchi
08-27-2009, 06:46 PM
Name:
Euiji Yuuchi

Gender:
male

Age:
85/ 20

Appearance:
Euiji stands at six foot one inches and weighs 152 pounds. Although this could point to him being chunky he actually isn't he simply is big for his size. His hair is long at shoulder length and has a slight silver tint to it. Although its well kept it isn't straightened. He is quite muscular which is from his training and he has a well formed six pack from hard work. Euiji's eyes are a dark red color and seem to be able to look through most people.

Euiji wears his set of black and white Shingami Robes. In his belt you can see his Zanpakuto stuffed in there. His socks are white like all the shinigami have and he also has the wood sandals like the rest of the group.




Personality:
Euiji is a very nice person. He tends to like helping people with all kind of affairs. He also seems to be bullied a lot when he was in academy. This was because he never let his emotions leave his body, Simply because they tend to control him which is something he really dislikes due to his stubbornness sometimes.

He takes a liking to playing with peoples minds when they annoy him. Although sometimes this fails for a multitude of reasons. Like being hit in the face and being sent out he tends to simply laugh this off. Clearly to the laughs of his friends. Which is some of the comical feeling he gets out of it.



Biography:
Euiji was born into a small family in the human world. His parents died when he was only five years of age . Euiji himself died when he was eight due to hunger and ended up in the soul world in the Rukongai.

Our story starts with a young silvered haired boy with dried persimmons in his arms. He stops and sees young blond haired boy lying at the ground. That seemed to be dying of hunger or very close to it at least. So the young silvered haired boy went over and put a dried persimmon to his mouth. After the event the boy named Vince and him became friends. The both entered the shingami school together a year later. The two all the remained friends through out school. After taking the entrance exams they were both placed in the advanced class.

Euiji studied hard through out his school career. Making sure that he did all his homework and practice activates. He usually got good grades on almost everything that he did. So his grades averaged out to all A , A- , A+ ‘s on his report card. In his second year of the academy Vince and his relationship changed. They had been best friends for quite and while now. But in that year the two of them started to realize that they might have other feelings for each other. Ones that involved the big L word which was Love.

So that year the two of the started dating out in the open. Not caring what other people thought of them. Because of the fact that they were both boys. They continued to date all threw there school years. When they graduated them remain together and were put on the same squad. In first mission as Shinigami to the human world they were paired together as a team.

Division applying to: 3

Zanpakuto appearance:
Serpinto is shorter than most of the swords the shingami have. It can barely be called a kantana due to its size. The blade its self is a normal sword colored silver. The tip of his sword is a light gold color. The hilt is like a closed S shape and look sort like a snake the warping around the handle is a dark blue ribbon. When it is unreleased it takes the form of a wakizashi.

GinMaru Yuuchi
08-27-2009, 06:51 PM
Sample mission:
Euiji awoke at about six a clock that friday morning with a yawn. He started at the bright ceiling above his head for a couple of moments. Before reaching his arms up into the air to stretch with another yawn from his mouth. Slowly he sat up and pushed himself up of his black sheeted queen sized bed. The silver haired man stared at the wall for a couple of seconds realizing he had training soon to come that day. He made his way to the chair in his room where his robes were laid out. After removing his pajamas he put the robes on instead. All with a smile spread across his thin lips.

Once his belt was tied he made his way over to his mirror to check his hair. He stared at it for a couple of minutes and touched it a few times. Before bringing both his hands up into his sleeves and headed for the door of his dorm. He had left it open slightly over night by mistake so he simply nudged it lightly with his arm, it opened. I probably should have closed that last night hm. He thought to himself with a smile still being kept on his face.

After he shut the door behind him he walked down the hall at a normal speed. Still smiley even though it was a cloudy day outside. Euiji also seemed to smile not matter what. It was just his thing and he had been doing it for years. So many of the kids at school seemed to afraid of him. So he did not have many friends at all in school. The only one seemed to be his buddy Vince. The two of them were really close infact closer than you would think.
Yuuchi eventually arrived at the door to the school and entered. While ignoring a couple of looks from the other students that where around. He kept that happy face and kept on walking. Euiji was in the advance classes of the school instead of the regular classes that they had. So he had quite a bit of walking from the front door. Before he even reached the area where his class rooms were. He walked along he greeted random people with smiles and nods. And once in a while stopped to chat with people that he was friendly with.

His final stop was the classroom where his classes would be held today. He walked in and sat in the back row were he usually sat. Soon the other students started to file in followed by their teacher. The teacher began the lesson as soon as he reached the front of the room. Today the teacher was talking about the different spells. During class everyone was suppose to take notes on what he said. Euiji listened attentively through the whole lesson with a smile on like he usually did everyday. While taking the notes that he was suppose to. Yuuchi handwriting was usually barely readable to anyone but the teacher ,Vince and himself. It looked like he was rushing through everything when he did. Which was not the case at all. He took his time on all his work to make sure that it was right. At the end of the lesson he gathered his stuff and left the room. After all the other kids had left. To avoid all the pushing and shoving that usually happen.

After class he spent a couple hours wondering around on his usual walk. Along the way he would stop to tease the random person. Before going on his way once again with a smile. At about seven a clock he headed back to his dorm to work on homework. When he was done he went to bed at about nine. Not even bothering that night to change into his bed time clothes. It was day at the school that day and he was glad.

Later that week he had his first mission as a shinigami. Euiji was excited to find out that his friend Vince was going to be there. That morning he rushed to get ready with a smile on his face. Before to the assigned meeting spot to see if Vince was already there. The mission was simple one there had been some small hollow spotted in the human word. So Vince ,acouple others and himself were assigned to go and stop them. Euiji looked for his friend for couple moments. Before spotting him threw two people that were blocking his way.

Euiji's smile lowered for a couple moments at this. He stood there for a couple seconds. Before his smile returned to his face once more. "Excuse me please" he said the people kindly. The two girls look at him for a moment after stopping their conversation with each other. The girls looked very upset that he had said anything to them. They ignored him and went back to their conversation. "Excuse me" he said to them once more with a brighter smile.

Figuring that they might have not heard him the first time. So he deiced to try again just in case that was the case. He waited a couple moments for their answer. But he got no response that time from them. So he gently poked one the girl in the shoulder. The girl shot him a look and said "what" in a the rudest way possible. " Do you mind if I squeeze by?" he asked nicely with his smile still on his lips. Totally ignoring that the girl was rude to him. The girl blinked at him before looking to her friend. Who nodded to her and mouth some words that Euiji payed no attention to what so ever. "Fine just hurry up and walk by we were in the middle of an important conversation." The girl told in him the same tone as before.

Euiji bowed gently to the girl as she moved side for him. He then walked by her swinging his arms lightly. Ignoring the fact that the girl were now saying this and that about him be hide his back. He heard them but he choice to ignore it figuring that it was not important. When he finally reached Vince they entered the human world with the others to start the mission. The mission was on a Wednesday and lasted for most of the day.

Later in the evening Euji was lying in the arms of Vince in the grass. Vince told him that one day he hoped they would be in the same division. Euiji did not doubt they would be in the same one. Seeing they had been best friends and more than that for like ever. So people had to notice that and put them in the same sqaud. As for the Captain statement and the comment after that from Vince’s mouth. Euiji certainly hope that those things would come true. He smiled lightly when his cheek was kissed by his boyfriend.


Note: Vincente gave me permission to use him in my profile J

Ultranator
08-27-2009, 07:28 PM
Note: Vincente gave me permission to use him in my app

Did Tite Kubo give you permission to completely rip off his character from the manga?

You need to check the App rules again.

http://www.bleachanime.org/forums/showthread.php?t=26537

6. Also, do not use a character from bleach or any existing TV show, movie, or book, or any real life person as a descriptive term. ( “His hair is like Ichigo.” or, “He was big and strong like Arnold Schwarzenegger.” It is lazy, and would be much better to say: “His hair was bright orange and spiky.” or, “He was a large man, with big strong muscles. He always tried to pump you up.” ) If you want your character to look like someone, then describe them.

This includes basing your entire character off of a character from the manga or anime. You need to completely redo this and choose a new name and description.

GinMaru Yuuchi
08-27-2009, 08:02 PM
alright i fixed it up, i hope i the changes work laugh out loud :)

Ultranator
08-29-2009, 07:25 AM
Okay, thank you for making a more original character. Here are some more things that you can do to improve your application.

First, your zanpakuto does not have a name yet. Or rather, you don't know what it is, because you are not connected to it enough yet to even hear its voice, let alone learn its name. Please fix it so that it's simply just a description of the sword in its sealed form.

The rest of your application appears to be acceptable.

Your sample mission, however needs a lot of work. There are quite a few spelling error (like celing should be ceiling, and infact is in fact.) Also, sentences have subjects and verbs. Having a sentence start with "before" or "as" means that you need to connect that to another thought. ex:

Before reaching his arms up into the arm to stretch with another yawn from his mouth.

Well, first, I think you meant 'air' instead of 'arm. Before reaching his arms up into the air to stretch with another yawn from his mouth, he did what?

As he sat up and pushed him self up of of his black sheeted queen sized bed

As he sat up and pushed himself (one word) up out of his black sheeted queen sized bed, he did what?

About half of the first three paragraphs in your sample mission are like this.

Also, if you're writing someone's thoughts, you need to indicate it just like as if they were saying it. Instead of quotes, there are a variety of ways to do this. You can use colors: I like apples, the grape thought. You can use apostrophes: 'I like grapes,' the apple thought. If you want to be super fancy, you can use apostrophes and italics: 'I like grapes and apples,' thought the pear as he chased them with a fork and knife. Either way, you need to figure out some way to differ it from normal text.

So, please read through your sample chapter slowly. look for spelling errors, and fix all of those fragment sentences.

GinMaru Yuuchi
09-04-2009, 10:48 PM
Is it all better now , please let me know. I hope it it is :):ichigo: and i did mention his swords name. it is the first word in the section on the zanpaktou thing.:byakuya:

anime-niac
09-05-2009, 06:18 AM
Don't mention the zanpakuto's name at all. This implies that you know it.

Ultranator
09-05-2009, 06:49 AM
Don't mention the zanpakuto's name at all. This implies that you know it.

What he said. You don't know your zanpakuto's name yet! It's just a sword right now. It has no name. It can't talk to you. You can't see it's spirit. That all happens later as your character develops.

As for your sample chapter. I don't see any improvements. You need to read through it. There are words there that might be spelled right, but are not the right word for a particular sentence. Also, if there's a before, there has to be an after. "Before he did something he did something else." You cant leave the sentence hanging without completing the thought. It would be like someone playing a C major scale, and stopping at B.